Young Writers Society

Hi names 22Midnight
here for a read and review

this is so something that i can relate to, a mean the uncertainty of what they might say if you tell them the truth.

what if there not feeling the same way as you and you end up losing your best friend but also your crush.

in the end sometimes it's better to just remain silent instead of speaking, but some rare times speaking up and telling dem the truth is better then not saying anything.

only thing i'd point out about this is i'm not real sure what you meant when you said luz in one of the lines, mind clarifying what you mean?

love is wonderful but it's hard and confusing as well and it comes with is sacrifices for sure.

this is real relatable there for a good read

hope you have a great Day/Night

anyway see ya!

Hello Jay! I really liked your piece here. (It makes me feel happy that there are still some soft nice loving guys out there. lol) I loved how you compared your love to luz and amity, prince charming and belle, (etc.. ), it just goes to show how strong and deep your for her is. My favorite part is "I want to sneak out of your house cause we stayed up late talking."

"How could I ever tell her she is my best friend." - Just a suggestion, that 'she is' becomes 'she's'. I just feel like the 'she is' is dragging the sentence.

But overall I really liked your piece, and I think you should keep writing things like this. I hope you do end up telling your best friend how you feel, and hopefully everything goes well.

Hey there My name is Ellie and I wanted to leave a quick review on this lovely piece. Let's get right into it, shall we?

I liked her, but I not only liked her, I fell in love with her.

she was beautiful. but this is how I would've said it to her:

I picture you & me dancing in the rain in the middle of nowhere. I think of you when I want to go to the beach and get some frozen yogurt & mess around in the water. I want to stargaze with you, & I want to sneak out of your house cause we stayed up late talking,

But it's not like I could ever tell you. I don't like you, I love you, in the way luz loves amity or in the way prince charming loves cinderella or belle loves beast.

I don't want a stereotypical fairy tale ending, I want my ending with you.

How could I ever tell her, she is my best friend.

Pretty Good way you convey the emotions of a man who's in Love,yet he doesn't know how to tell her.And there's the fear of rejectionI resonate,I relate with you. Way to Go:)

I relate to this so much! I'm going through something like this myself, but I just told my friend I think I'm in love with her the other night. I love the way you put the words together. It's beautiful, raw, and real. I was able to visualize everything.

My favorite part

I don't want a stereotypical fairy tale ending, I want my ending with you.

How could I ever tell her, she is my best friend.