Young Writers Society

Hi rainforest! I like your username! =D

I've been eyeing this poem for a few days now, so I figured I'd review it!

I love how you describe things! The imagery is very simplistic, but I love how it tackles the theme of growing up. So much is happening during this time, so I like that the narrator takes a more simple route! The connection to nature is also very lovely, and it works with the theme as well. Especially the plants, since plants symbolize growth! They can mean a lot of things.

The way I'd interpret it is a literal version of the "one day at a time" philosophy. That's a really interesting take on growing up! Usually it's the opposite. I like the fresh, self-reflecting tone that the narrator keeps throughout. It's new!

I mentioned how the nature imagery works, but I do think it's slightly messy! There's a lot going on, which is a bit hard to follow at times. I think the "plants growing out of the sidewalk" is such a meaningful metaphor, but it doesn't have enough time to shine! I like all of the imagery, but there isn't a real connection between it.

This is stunning though! It's really thought-provoking :')

- Solstice

Hey! I really love your poem; it encapsulates the feeling of being a teenager very well. Your word choice is absolutely phenomenal and it provides such beautiful imagery! Keep writing and have an awesome day!

Hi, hello! This is Ina speaking. I am here to write down a quick comment/review. By the way, I've been eyeing this in the Green Room, it's just that I was busy thinking of what to write for my next stories. Anyways, let's get into it.

I like this poem. It explains vividly what growing is like. As a teenager, it is painful to grow up, you know, you have mistakes, and sometimes the pain of the things in life you want to happen never happened. Or does it mean that you crave to find something? The title is okay, I think it works with it if this reassures you. By the way, were the small letters intentional?

Over all, it is good. Keep it up, @rainforest. I like the name. Have a good morning, day, afternoon, or night.

This is a very beautiful poem.