soundofmind I can't get over it. ur music is ahmazing!!!
A/N: Please listen to the song as you read if you're able. Click here to listen. All the music and singing is done by me!
what do you want from
all of these ashes?
they don’t have answers for you
can you move on from
such a great loss now?
what are you supposed to do?
and you don't have to tell me why
I know it hurts to say goodbye
each friendship is a sacrifice
I know it hurts to watch them die
when you
still love them too
what do you want from
these turning pages
you’re hoping for something new
but life keeps repeating
and the water's receding
what does it look like to push through?
and you don't have to tell me why
I know it hurts to say goodbye
each friendship is a sacrifice
I know it hurts to watch them die
when you
still love them too
is it worth the pressure
and pain and resistance
you wonder if you thought this through
did they really love you?
but how could you ask that?
did they ever say that to you?
and you don't have to tell me why
I know it hurts to say goodbye
each friendship is a sacrifice
I know it hurts to watch them die
when you
still love them too
what do you want from
all of these ashes?
they don’t have answers for you
Hi! I'm here to drop a quick review.
Note: This is the first time I'm reviewing a song, so sorry if it's not up to the mark.
I loved this song. The tune, the tone, the text... Everything was perfect. And I have to say, you have a great voice. It has that calming effect on me... The lullaby-type effect. The words feel so amazingly comforting and reassuring. Did you write this to comfort someone close to you? 'Cause I don't think it could get that perfect feel if you'd just thought it up. Or maybe that's just me ^_^.
How did you record the chorus part? Did it just sound like that because of some editing, or was it another person? Whatever it was, it was amazing. It sounded so... perfect. I have no other words.
All of those rhetorical questions, too, added to the comforting tone.
I think my favourite lines from the whole song were these:
and you don't have to tell me why
I know it hurts to say goodbye
Did you write this to comfort someone close to you?
How did you record the chorus part? Did it just sound like that because of some editing, or was it another person?
Was the lack of capitalization and punctuation intentional?
hey @soundofmind here to drop off a review on one of your works!!
lets get in to it
First off @soundofmind what i had read one was when you doing and a song and make it as a poem and thats fine cause i love listening to a song that is a vibe and i have a favorite line @soundofmind on your work what do you want from
all of these ashes?
they don’t have answers for you
can you move on from
such a great loss now?
what are you supposed to do and you don't have to tell me why
I know it hurts to say goodbye
each friendship is a sacrifice
I know it hurts to watch them die
when you
still love them too this was my line that was a good vibe to listen
Second my compliment from your work and here is my opinion to your work okay @soundofmind it would of been better if you would sing the whole song to us Soundofmind we just want you to be proud of yourself and keep writing
Third how you can improve your work is just keep listening to your support that loves your song while you singing cause to me you doing well and good with your work
Hey sound!! Incoming review!
I was a bit timid to review one of your works because I didn't want to ruin the voice I made up in my head for you. But they literally sound identical and you are such a talented singer! Well, let's get onto the review!
I'll start out with critiques.
I always find that rhyming "why" with "goodbye" is really predictable. But I think predictable lyrics are better than a predicable melody because it only comes a few times while the melody is engraved in the whole song.and you don't have to tell me why
I know it hurts to say goodbye
andyou’re hoping for something new
Aren't rhythmically off by a songwriting standpoint, but I think more, so the way it's sung. Like you rush through "hoping for" and "It look like to push." But I can't say anything for myself because I'm a trash songwriter, but I find when I do try to write a song, I have parts that aren't rhythmically flowing together with other parts. Maybe you could play around with which parts to put emphasis on.what does it look like to push through?
andbut life keeps repeating
and the water's receding
The falsetto overlays on the vocals are so chilling like they literally gave me chills! My falsetto is something in my own voice I have to work on but you executed it so well!but how could you ask that?
did they ever say that to you?
and the hurt in your voice was well put in this line. Did your dear friend ever say any of those things to you? I mean the whole bridge is fantastic!did they ever say that to you?
Greetings, my iconic friend!
I'm probably like the least qualified person ever to critique one of your songs, but what I can do is give you my interpretation of it and what it makes me feel and all that good stuff. Besides, it's revmo, and if I'm gonna reach my lofty review goal I'd better start reviewing everything I read. :3
First of all, as always, thank you so much for sharing your songs with us, you angelic-voiced musician you! There's something sooo soothing about each of your tracks, from the gentle strumming to all the hauntingly beautiful harmonizations. I truly adore your music. <3
The soothing quality of this song goes a level deeper than just the melody. The desire to soothe and console is kneaded throughout the lyrics as well, and is reinforced by the tone of your voice.
My best interpretation of the lyrics as a whole is that narrator is comforting - as well as empathizing with - someone who recently had a bad falling-out with a close friend. The narrator, too, has experienced this kind of loss, and comments that this seems to be a repeating pattern in life.
This song could have easily been written from the perspective of the person who is currently suffering, but instead it's from the perspective of the friend or family member. I find this to be a wonderful, ironic detail, because the suffering person must still have a lovely friend in the narrator, who in turn is being completely transparent with their opinions on friendships. I'm probably reading way too much into the possible relationship between these two characters, if they even are concrete characters, but I'm wondering if any of the advice and sympathy that the narrator is sharing could double as comments/concerns about their own dynamic. Like this line:
did they really love you?
but how could you ask that?
did they ever say that to you?
My best interpretation of the lyrics as a whole is that narrator is comforting - as well as empathizing with - someone who recently had a bad falling-out with a close friend.
Perhaps - and this is more likely - you're inspired by your OCs! And this song is narrated by you, with all your life experience and friendships and stuff, and you're speaking to a character like James who is undergoing something very similar to what you've gone through.
did they really love you?
but how could you ask that?
did they ever say that to you?
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