Young Writers Society

Hello, ForeverYoung299. Happy RevMo!

Congratulations on being so close to competing the checklist challenge! That's incredible!

I'm leaving a review here for the checklist challenge!

So, let's get to it:

This is a very short and simple story, but it conveys the message well. Writing something so short can be challenging because you need to grab and keep the reader's attention in so little words, but you did this well. Kudos to you!

I agree that this is relatable too! The beginning and the ending are very important, but the middle brings them together. You can't have a story without the middle.

Speaking of the structure, I thought it was hilarious when you showed the examples of the beginning and the end. Now, I want to know how Myr became the god of mindlessness.

Beginning– Myr was thinking if the world would have turned upside down, which was followed by her mother shouting, “Myr, give me a blanket and a blazer. Suddenly, the temperature dropped almost 20 degree celsius”

There's a book called A Beginning, a Muddle and an End that might prove useful, or at least amusing.

Hi! I'm a little late on the request, sorry about that. I like how this is short and simple and how it explains the struggles writers might have. I thought it was very interesting writing and also relatable. It sometimes happens to me, where there is no middle. You can stretch the start and the ending a little to create some middle. However, usually, I have trouble creating the ending or continuing on. I get stuck on some parts while writing too. I don't think it's only you who have trouble. So with that, I'd like to suggest a few things to you.

I was reading an article which said that the beginning and the end are the most important, of course, it was correct.

P.S. It sounded to funny to me. I don't know why. Thus, I wanted to share

This is so random and I love it. I'm still not sure what happened in between, but my guess is that Myr accidentally turned the world upside down and earned the title "god of mindlessness" for her actions. My one critique is that you spelled "fun stuffs" "fun staffs". You're really funny and I can't wait to see what you post next! Thank you for your fun staffs.

Hi! I’m not sure if this is going to be long enough to be a review, but.....

Your problem is soooo relatable. I too have a beginning and an end, but not a lot of middle. But I’m still writing the chapters. I mean, obviously there is going to be an adventure and travelling in the ‘middle’, but exactly WHAT will there be?

See, I just get ‘flashes’ of my story. Flashes of ideas. And I write those ideas down. For now, I’m just doing the beginning, and I’m letting my pen guide me. Your idea is a fantasy one, so you could use the first few chapters in showing how Myr’s world goes upside down! You could keep the pace a tad bit slow and sprinkle it with humour, to keep the reader entertained. You could add a few of those time periods when everything seems illogical and the protagonist is confused, you can add so much!

But, all I can say is.... if you’re in love with that story, then you will daydream. And you’ll daydream the plot of the story eventually. You just need to trust yourself and your story. Keep writing what you know. The rest will come to you.
I still get those flashes, and they will piece together the whole story.
So start somewhere, and start with love.
Oh hey! Look! It’s big enough to be a review!
Anyway, I hope it helped!
Keep writing!
(If you want other people joining in this story, you can make a roleplay!)
~rida

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Okay....well not much to actually review here per see but I do still want to try and say something useful so let me go ahead and attempt that very quickly here. It sounds like a pretty fun little idea that you have down here...anyway.

I was reading an article which said that the beginning and the end are the most important, of course, it was correct.

But, the thing is something else. I have a beginning and an end but no middle.

Beginning– Myr was thinking if the world would have turned upside down, which was followed by her mother shouting, “Myr, give me a blanket and a blazer. Suddenly, the temperature dropped almost 20 degree celsius”

End- Myr became the god of mindlessness.

Hey, ForeverYoung! I'm here with the review you requested c: Sorry it took so long! I'll do you other one soon c:

Ah, yes... the middle problem. I hate that issue... The middle is, in my honest opinion, just as important as both the beginning and the end-- it connects them to one another and takes up th bulk of your story.

I've found that coming up with a few major plot points (e.g. a death, romance, etc) and expanding on those in one's notes really helps writers out-- in fact, it's set me up for a few new chapters of The Sorcerer's Secret, a new book I'm writing. I'd recommend trying that out and seeing how it works! c:

Have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!!!

Hi ForeverYoung299,
I'm here with a review. I'm not sure if this is advice, an opinion, or an actual review. Consider this a cocktail of review.
Let's start with the middle problem. To be fair I've got a similar problem. I wrote a great beginning a dramatic end but the middle...My idea of how to deal with it I would make a scheme of the things that are solved and "unsew" your story. Does it make sense? It's as you have the puzzle done and then u find the pieces of it and write how you put them into place.
As for the story, it's very interesting. If I read this on the back of a book I would buy it. So, I think this is a great start.
My review is quite short. I hope you have a great morning/afternoon/evening,
MoonIris.