Young Writers Society

I really liked your poem. It was short and had a good impact. The theme you chose was very relatable and had a good message. It described our inclination to go towards something that can cause you harm, yet you experience a natural urge to do this.Just as a burning candle flame could kill a moth, some of the things that you want to do or places you desire to go may prove to be inherently fatal, though they may appear to be very attractive and inviting. Keep writing like this.....

This poem was AMAZING!! I absolutely loved reading it. The plot and theme is great. The title is awesome, even though it is so simple, I thought it would be a piece about an actual candle. Boy, was I surprised! This poem was very easy to read and flowed very well. Your grammar, punctuation, and spelling was great, I didn't catch any mistakes. Keep on writing and have a very Merry Christmas!

So I lovvveee the idea here, and the sense of attraction and popularity you accurately describe with the people you call candles. It's a Brilliant metaphor that you've nailed marvelously! One thing I'd change though, is making it less wordy and shortening the lines. Like when u say they light up a room, take out can and a and just say they light up rooms or something like that. But honestly that's it, it's a great poem <3

I loveee this so much. The last line was so powerful and made me get like relationship vibes where he's basically like the candle and your just a little moth that keeps flying around him. The poem was so well written. It had a great rhyme scheme and lots of good vocab. A lot of the lines were really powerful. I think its really cool how you used a candle and a moth to depict this I ould have never though of that and it works very well for symbolizing. Thanks for writing I hope to read more from you soon:)

EverLight here with a review! This review is not intended to offend or hurt you or make your novel or poem seem bad, but be warned you may feel offended anyway

First Impression
Well! It's lovely to see new members posting their first work! I'm honored to be one of the first reviewers you get to know <3. (Not constructive I know.)
Anyway I thought this was very unique, and you do have some wise things to say here.

Grammar & Punctuation.
You have no issues I could see. Nice going!

Style & Flow
There were a few things I thought could be changed-

Their smiles can light up a room.
But when it goes out they radiate gloom.

Their smiles can light up a room, or radiate gloom

Regardless of the light that beckons.
Get to close and you’ll burn in seconds.

Regardless of the light that beckons
You burn in secants...

You’ll do anything to see their light.
Make sure they’re doing alright.

Bringing yourself to the brink of destruction.
Caught in the web of a waxy construction.

So easily drawn to the flame.
And when they burn out you take the blame.
All you want is their warm embrace.

Though you understand that won’t be the case.
You can’t avoid them and their blanket of heat.

Just to be close feels like a treat.
Without their light, you feel like a goth.
Because if he’s the candle I guess I’m the moth.

Because if he’s the candle I guess I’m the moth.