Hello there!
this is such a beautiful poem! i absolutely love the flow, its as smooth as flowing silk!
the rhymes are excellent! One thing that stands out is the visuals, how you illustrate scenes using your words. Your writing is a visual treat.
"My tired bones rest gladly on the forest floor,
Hidden with the secrets of the ancient trees.
Free I lay from a world of war,
Here my soul can be at ease."
This passage is wonderful and soulful. the secrets of the ancient trees is a wonderful line.
"As I disappear beneath the grasses’ sway." this is such a beautiful line too. Once again, i love the imagery.
"And many cry and fill with woe
At the news of the girl who had no legacy
But an unknown end is not a foe
Rather, a peace that would spark jealousy."
The ending is really nice too, the girl who had no legacy is a curious line.
I really like your poem. Keep up the good work! hope to read more from you in the future
Much love,
Zaibae
Points: 53
Reviews: 7
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