Young Writers Society

I suppose it is a bit hard to review on three lines of poetry, but here I am with a review to get my third review star! I'll just say that the first line is very expressive... it really is like an explosion of a gamut of emotion that could come from the explanation in the title. These four explicit words can be interpreted in very different ways depending on who is reading it. I never thought anyone could write a haiku with curse words, but you did it! Thumbs up.
The second line is very solemn and connecting. It draws the reader into what you are feeling and thinking after such an event as described in the title. This is sort of the line that spells things out in a coherent manner. First line, explosion, second line, you calmed down...
Now the third line. I'm a little stumped. What does winter wonderland have to do with anything? Maybe it is just something peaceful to distract the reader from the darkness of the first two lines. Maybe it is the narrator distracting themselves. Maybe it represents nostalgia. Maybe it was random and I'm reading into it too much... we'll see.
This is by far the most unique haiku I've seen before. Two thumbs up.

Hey Aley, saw this and thought I'd leave a little comment.

The bitter edge in this is done well and the contrast between the first two lines and then the "winter wonderland" line is excellent - because it's so dissonant. The reader gets a sense on how off-putting the attempts of people trying to console really sounds to the speaker. I also love that you don't give away everything in the title. So much is said after someone experiences tragedy, so all those difficult phrases and emotions go through the reader's mind - and then they're met with this anger (line 1), uselessness (line 2), and the sarcastic? irony? in line 3. It's a nice piece on what grief and loss feels like, that could be informative to people who've tried to throw the "It's fine" out to people who don't want to hear that in their grieving.

I think I'd put a period or exclamation mark at the end for a sense of finality. But I like what you've done here. <3 - alliyah

Hey there Aley. You pointed your poem out to me a couple of days ago, but I just managed to get around to some new reviews. Also a bit surprised that you haven't gotten any reviews on this just yet. I'm thinking that it might be a combination of how short this piece is and also the final line, which doesn't automatically match with the rest of the situation.

Kiss my ass dipshit,

I'm sick of "It will be fine;"

winter wonderland