Hey manilla! Thanks for requesting a review. I read that comment you left for Shady, and I know slightly about this fandom, so I at least have some of the context here.
I think little snippets of thoughts, or a part when a character recollects something, can be fun to both write and read, especially if it's a fic setting and the reader knows who this person is, and how they behave. It's like getting a cool snapshot of a scene and be able to be right back at that moment.
I really like that we're told all of Adrian's thoughts, as a nice little progression through this day that he realizes who Ladybug is. I think you have a nice feel for his character, and it's pretty relatable for someone to go over their feelings for another person, and of course, the "superhero" lens gives this idea and story another layer of secretive stuff.
I think the way that Adrian addresses Ladybug, with all of the uses of figurative language and comparing her to all of these fantastical things: the sky at night, an enchanting creature. This way of addressing someone that he has these strong feelings for (perhaps more than a crush) could definitely align itself with plenty of other teenagers/younger-ish people, as I'm sure someone's written poetry that sounds like what's mentioned above.
One thing I appreciate in this is that Adrian finally starts really piecing together that if two girls had the same colored hair, wore it the same way, and probably acted somewhat similar, could quite possibly be the same person! (I'd love to see this from like Marinette's view when she realizes who Cat Noir is, and she could go through a similar mindset.)
That's something that always frustrated me in superhero films/books/shows, as it really seems the characters would realize that the voices were the same, or the hair, or something like that. XD How could they not notice?
Overall, I really like short pieces like this, as I see it as a fun thing to go through and really get into this character's head. I like that this ends positively and even the play on words with his eyes welling up with tears while it starts to rain outside. Very cute! I'm happy that he's not disappointed or something kind of mean like that with realizing who she is.
I like this piece a lot <3
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