I love this. Though simple you have packed so much feeling unto such a short poem. I feel that you have based this off of own personal feelings, if my assumptions are correct, you can always talk to me. i've been through hell and back so I will understand and i am always willing to listen. The only suggestions that I have for you is to add more punctuation to this to add clarification. You are missing several commas in certain places. All said and done though, I absolutely love this. Good job! Keep it up!
~Hanna
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