Hey EagkeFly,
Here for a review, your is quite easy and intresting. The thing is that you stop rhyming, when you have started with a rhythm, so why do you stop it . Secondly, if you put in stanza (maybe 2 ) it will be more understandable and more attractive as well . However the poem is good and i really like it.
If you have time , visit my profile and give your review, it will be very inspiring for me. ☺
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