Young Writers Society

Hey Ishan212!

I love this poem of yours. It's very sweet and nice. I just have two things to say. Thing one is: In every line, you put capitalization but you did not put any commas or periods or anything. So, it kinda made me confused on what you were trying to express, sometimes. Thing two is: In the third last sentence: "Until we are are alive" you might just want to delete one of the ares.
Overall, this was really enjoyable!

Keep on writing!

~Liberty500

Hi, this is ZeldaIsShiek, here to review another amazing piece of poetry and beat the Werewolves once and for all! For the Witches shall win in the end! But before that happens, I am going to help you improve your writing as a whole and improve you as a Young Writer in the process. Of this I am certain. Are you ready? Let's begin the review!

I really like this poem because I have a few friends who I really care about, and they are all the most important part of my day. That is one of the reasons why I prefer weekdays and High School over being home all day, cut off from my friends and the world they live in. The first line also going well with this, especially since it describes friends as rays of sunshine that can brighten up your day and make your life better as a result. I really like this poem for that reason, along with your amazing writing in general. Great work!

My reactions:

Hello, E.E here for a possibly quick review and maybe some utter nonsense! Grim is here as well, drinking hot cocoa and being a slacker. *Grim looks over, glaring* So, lets get started.

So, first thing I notice that a bunch of places are missing comma and periods. A bunch of places missing's commas are "Friends are the rays of sunshine", "The ones who make the whole world bright", "The ones who walk with us", and "So love your friends" All need commas. Any line after a comma will need a period, question mark or exclamation mark after the last word. The flow was pretty good and I noticed no other spelling or grammar mistakes. So good on that part!

Now is when I dissect your poem and see if I can't get its meaning right! So, in your poem you are talking about friends. How they can bring happiness into your life and they can change it for the better. They can make time pass so quickly and they can make it seem so slow. Don't lose them. They are the only ones you have in life.

Otherwise, I loved the poem and keep up the good work! Happy Halloween! I need to go now, Grim has some more dead to reap and I ran out of cocoa for him. Cheerios and fruit loops to you!

This is very good without friends we have NO life, lfie are very important to us
In good times and in bad, in happy and in sad yes hahah I it was a little rhyme
Well we need a friend in our journey, one to help us out and one who loves you
because of who you are and everything accepts of what you am
I like true friendship because that can make us stronger in Life
True friends are the best ones, but just friends are also okay....
We can always count on them , no matter what Life brings us, no matter who we are
Friends are little flowers that bloom and make everything feel alright, even when we are
down they can make us laugh.
I don't know if you'll understand this, because it was a really bad review hahaa. I have said everything whas coming up in my mind, about friends. I hope you understand this a little bit?
English is not my first language so I think my English is bad I want to practice more ;D

Love; Bree

Hello Ishan212! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.

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