Hey Cat, I'ma give you a short review!
Gardens. I love gardens. Plants and life in general, really. I have potted plants all over my room, and overrunning my aquarium. There's even fake ivy hanging from my windows instead of curtains because I'm so extra. But that's all pretty irrelevant, basically I am just trying to say that if something is about plants/gardens I will like it.
Okay, REVIEW!
I'm no poetry expert. I am only reviewing as a reader and talking about what looks and sounds good to me.
Flow and punctuation was awkward, which was already mentioned in other reviews so I won't point everything out. The squiggles (what are they called??) between each stanza were kinda weird, but also I liked it because it gave off a bit of a magic-y feel.
Second thing is the rhyming. My advice would be to either make everything rhyme nicely, or don't rhyme. This in between stuff isn't doing it for me. It makes it kind of seem like you don't know how to rhyme and these are just bad attempts.
The last part about opening your eyes to your room is a little weird. Too specific I think. My suggestion would be make it overall reality or something.
One more thing: add more plants/garden stuff. No don't listen to me I have a weird thing about plants. Anyways, love the magical feel of this poem! Keep it up!
Points: 255
Reviews: 30
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