Okay, I really like this! Especially, the part where you say, "A new tree grows The new leaves fall And the cylce starts again," (16-18 Tylexie). I like the portrayal of us, of how even though we hurt the world that everything comes back together and heals and continues on. In honesty, this is a really well formed piece that links us to the world and the world to us. The only thing I can see that could be fixed, though it necessarily doesn't need to be, is puncuation. Like I said before, you don't need to add puncuation because it is a poem and poems can go outside the normal puncuation structure. It mostly depends on the writer. I enjoyed your poem and the flow of it!
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