Hello there Dracula and Happy Near 3 Year YWS anniversary. It's just lizzy dropping by real quick so without a further ado, let the reviewing begin.
I haven't really read the rest of this story and I don't have the time to do so, so I'll just try to jump into this feet first. One thing I do like about this, despite the fact that I have little to no clue what's going on, the story is very easy to break into. Sometimes there will be lag in between story parts and novel chapters, making it very hard for the readers to catch up. But this piece did a good job of reflecting to the previous events so there was pretty much context to everything that I came across.
The idea of jumping into paintings like they're an entirely different world, is quite the interesting idea to me and sort of reminds me of a good movie. (One of the Night Museum series, I think?) But the idea of paintings being alive or being portals is a fairly cool topic that I haven't seen many authors touch on. (Oscar Wildes' Dorian Gray is one of the few examples that I know of.)
The picture at the bottom, I suppose links back into the carnival that the character had visited through the painting. Maybe it would mean more to me if I had read the rest of the story but at the moment, it's just sort of hovering there. Could you possibly explain it's addition to me or something similar? It was like the only thing I was having doubts about.
I did particularly like the matron, even though i just saw her for a short glimpse of time. She seemed like she knew exactly what was going done in this school, magical portal classical paintings and all. I always have a soft spot for characters like these and dare I say she reminds me of Minerva.
The dialogue is a bit spotty here and there but isn't that much of a concern to me because there isn't much and it's pretty well padded by its surroundings. Perhaps a little bit of pep would help to push it along in certain spots. After the initial discovery it does seem to drag so that's where I would concentrate on pulling the strings a bit tighter. (I'm thinking something along the lines of adding more onto the heightened emotions and adrenaline of that moment.)
I actually don't have much more to say, these were just some overall observations. I probably should go back and read the rest of the story because it sounds fun.
Have a nice day.
~Lady Lizz
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