Hello there, Luata here for a review. I don't think I've reviewed any of your weeks before so I'll go ahead and give you the run-down of how my reviewing style works. I divide my review into sections to make it easier to read, and of course, you are the author, not me, so feel free to take my suggestions however you want. If you have questions or if I start rambling and not making sense (it is early morning here), drop me a comment or a PM, I'd be glad to help.
Overview
I really resonated with this poem. I'm getting a lot of that today, resonating with poems, which is something I don't normally do. Oh-no, emotional-me is making a comeback. Anyhow!! I have to disagree with @Nikayla because I think that the title of the poem should function as a line of the poem itself (even though I don't always follow that rule). Your poem had good flow, which made it enjoyable to read, which is always an important thing.
Grammar/Flow
Okay. I am not very good at grammar, so I'm sure there will be other people who are plenty more qualified than I for the grammar review, but I'll give it my best shot here. I could only find one problematic area, and it has to do more with flow and less with grammar.
I know where I belong and no one can tell me otherwise.
I'm having some trouble with this line. It doesn't really seem to fit with the rest of your poem. I would suggest rewriting to make this line a little less wordy. I think that would help it fit better with the rest of the poem.
In closing, I really enjoyed this piece. I look forward to reviewing future works!!
~Luata
Points: 5205
Reviews: 139
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