Hello Hello, I hope you dont mind me popping in a quick review. To start I know you might not see this nor change an almost 20-year-old work However I hope to still share my thoughts. For an older work might I say this is very underrated and should get more love. Both the energy and imagery in this work were breathtaking almost gothic feeling. I don't know why but it feels like something that would be put in the prologue for a grim romantic thriller.
Overall there is one line I would change ever so slightly." I break the seal on perfection" The on doesn't feel quite right perhaps something like " I break the seal of perfection" However that also feels a bit off as I am no professional.
As always I hope you going well wherever you are. Keep writing and remember to drink water!
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