Hello there. KingQueenKnave here, an honest reviewer. As a fellow lyricist, I couldn't help but be drawn to this song of yours. Naturally, I've imagined a tune to this song, and I anticipate this song to be played in a pop-rock style. As a side-note, I like your use of the image to emphasize the theme of your song. As to what it adds to the piece, I cannot say.
I like that you have used verse-chorus-verse, not necessarily because it's expected of a song, but because it gives your piece clarity. I like the use of the word "blue", and there is a remnant of a chorus in "I am sing sad songs for you, I feel so alone and blue".
I have some issues with this song, although they are a matter of personal taste over objectively wrong parts of your song. First of all, this is all block text. I am unsure as to where the verses and choruses are, so as an improvement, I would suggest you separate them as paragraphs, or label the different parts of the song. Secondly, there are a number of spelling mistakes here. "Peaces" should be pieces. "Began" should be begun. Thirdly, and most crucially, the subject matter you've chosen is often used in songs, which doesn't make your song totally unique.
In conclusion, it was a good attempt. There are some improvements that need to be addressed in both the execution and the subject matter.
Points: 5
Reviews: 46
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