Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Once long, long ago was a peaceful village called Moonshine. Everybody was charismatic and happy till a curse was placed upon it. The town is frozen in time forever to be until a young girl and her friends come upon it and start the journey of a lifetime.
Okay, well...right off the bat, I have this really isn't enough to be considered as a prologue. Its not really to do with the length. I've seen prologues of a similar length that manage to sound like well...prologues, but this one gives me more of a synopsis like vibe than anything else cause its just talking about an interesting setting of the story and then what the general plot will be. So there's that little detail to think about if you are in fact thinking about keeping this as a proper prologue to this story itself.
Anyway, onto what's actually in it, the first part is alright, its just a pretty generic statement that introduces the main setting here and well there's not much that you can really do wrong about that one. The second line though is a little off. I don't know if you can just describe every single person in a village as charismatic...happy seems like a word that would be used in a situation like that but charismatic strikes me as a bit off.
And then of course we have the last line which is what really drew me to the piece. It certainly seems like an interesting prospect to have a place frozen in time due to a curse...and well...I'd certainly want to read on to find out more.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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