Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Okay..well, this was quite an epic opening here, if this was meant to be a prologue of sorts, this would be ticking pretty much all the boxes that you would expect one of those to tick. This certainly makes you want to turn that page very enthusiastically.
Anyway let's get right to it,
It's hard living in the shadows.
Indeed...
Generations ago, our people lived with the others who call themselves human. We respected one another, had relationships and families and friends, worked together, fought together, lived through life shoulder to shoulder. We were safe in the knowledge that we were not judged or envied because of what we were, because we had never known any different. That was life to us.
Okay...well..certainly a very ominous note there to get a story started, oh dear, looks like we're getting right to some straight up danger here at the very beginning. And the way this just talks of human society as a thing of the past, and something that once was is certainly bringing across a note of this being set in some properly dark time. Well, you've definitely managed to catch my interest with this one.
Not anymore.
We are never safe now. We never were safe, because deep down, everyone who wasn't like us, everyone we knew and loved hated what we were. No-one should hate another they love simply because they are different. Prejudice defies the purpose of love, and to know that one you loved and one who loved you now hates you because of the blood running through your veins is a great burden.
Okayy....more ominous signs, looks like some kind of hate arose between humans in general and the whole of society has been driven apart or crumbled as a result. Certainly all this talk of hate is not a good sign, this is certainly headed in a very intriguing description. And the way its repeated multiple times that safety is not a thing anymore is...certainly setting the tone for this piece here.
In our time, we have grown used to being isolated. We know our ways, we know only what we have been taught by those who made us who we were. We were raised to stay away from those our ancestors had lived beside for hundreds, thousands of years, and we were trained to be able to survive without their help, without their technology and things that would likely kill us, taught how to kill and prepare food, to heal ourselves. All the while, our once friends forget all that knowledge, replacing it with monstrous machines and things to "make their lives better". We were also trained to defend ourselves when the time would come. We thought it would never come, that we were skilled at hiding and that our kind had been erased from living and written memory.
Okay, well that certainly seems to speak of some sort of evolution away from folks...now I wonder if this is perhaps talking about another subspecies of humans or something...perhaps vampires or werewolves or something along those lines. Considering the way this description goes, I think that fits the bill of what we've seen in earlier paragraphs, well, let's see I suppose. I should probably not be theorizing things like this so early in a story..xD
There are stories of us, and we live on in myths and legends. The people of this age skim over these stories like they are dead, transparent things. In truth they are real and living stories that tell not legends, but true recounts of our kind and theirs. The people that lived with ours could tell you that, but today, we are a lost tale, a forgotten fire that still burns away beneath the surface of the world. We are still a living society, a people frozen in the time we lived in thousands of years ago.
Ahh, the epicness of that paragraph is on another plane there, I do always love things that have premises like that, and now I get the feeling that my earlier theory is right somehow...this seems to be supporting that at any rate. And the way that you depict this is almost perfect for a really epic prologue.
We are your werepeople, your changers and witches. We are your demons, your rakshasa and shamans. We are the hidden race that have become accustomed to being hated and hunted, but we never knew what was coming.
We never knew our world and their world would crash and burn.
OOoh, that's a lovely reveal there, and it looks like we're talking alll the myths and legends here...soo...well my guess was not wrong...I guess, but not correct either...xD...but well, this is quite a blockbuster start here, and the line at the end is a perfectly ominous way to end here. Certainly makes you wanna read on to find out what happens here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, this is a pretty awesome start here. It is definitely a story I would follow and it looks like this is a pretty cool world that you've created. The premise is certainly amazing.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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