I was going to review this, but then I saw that you had eight already. Such is life.
Right away you've given us an interesting character- not one of L'Amour's honorable, soft-spoken men but a hardened criminal who still manages to show off his human side. But enough of that- let's get to the "review" part.
But how could he have known? How could he have known that the one of the most feared man
Typos, man! Take out that first "the" and remember, it's "one of the most feared men or "the most feared man" but not both.
In a million years he wouldn’t have guessed it.
My dad, a stickler for historical accuracy, would chide you to make sure you know whether "in a million years" was a common phrase in the old West. Since he's not a member of YWS, I'll chide you for him.
I’m not too worried about any of these people forgetting me for a while, but writing down my life seems to give me a sort of security about it all. As long as these pages live on, I will too.
I hope we get to know "these" people in the next chapter, because you haven't even mentioned the town's name yet.
Maybe this’ll become one of those bestselling dime novels in the east for some Yankees who have nothing better to do except read about the world which I live in.
Irony is a funny thing. Can you just imagine those Yankees paging through the story, not knowing or caring that it's all true?
But most importantly, my story isn’t about the hero. Meadows is your hero. I don’t have locks of golden hair and innocent, greenish-blue eyes that peer out at you from beneath a wide-brimmed hat. I’m not the poor kid whose father was killed and who’s brave enough to leave home on his own to get his revenge. If you’d rather read a yarn about some hero like Meadows, I’m sure any of the Yankees’ dime novels will do.
Bravo! Thank you for a) not having the man call himself a villain (nobody does that) and b) having him make sport of the stereotypical hero. Do we get to learn what he does look like in the next chapter?
Ha! Like I care who'll get my knife or my rifle or my horse. I think Meadows likes my horse, so I'll let him keep him.
It's just like Proverbs- the wicked disappear completely while the righteous leave a lasting inheritance to future generations. (Now I hope you spend the rest of the novel showing us the narrator's good qualities along with his bad ones.)
I despise having any hair on my face, but I guess it’s a good policy to keep razors away from prisoners.
Again he shows his human side.
You have a great start here. I chuckled at the narrator's (dare I say it?) gallows humor, and I want to learn what happened to him- and what will happen at the end. Great job, and I'm off to read chapter two.
Points: 1395
Reviews: 565
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