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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well, this was quite a prologue here, showing two separate perspectives of this same problem, and well you can clearly see these are people in two very different situations here and both of those situations appear to be really interesting here. If these are the character's we'll be following going forward, this would certainly make for quite an awesome story here.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Annaliese had been wandering around the burning city helplessly for days. What else was one to do when her family, her home, her whole life had been destroyed with just one switch of a button. Of course she knew who she had to blame of course. This was all that mystics doing. Annaliese felt her brow furrow just at the thought of his name... Bartholomew. She cursed him silently, and gave up fighting her exhaustion. She crumpled to the ground in front of what seemed to be a fire ravished bakery, tears seeping through her hardened blue eyes. Annaliese knew that her days of luxury were over. She knew what she had to do next.
Well, this prologue is off to a powerful start there, someone that's been the victim of what appears to be a really, really serious crime there, the burning of an entire city doesn't seem like the sort of thing that just any villain is going to do out of the blue and the fact that this isn't even mysterious but this girl already knows who did it, is adding even more weight to what this could mean.
And of course the way things are phrased it appears this girl's family and potentially even the rest of the folks in this city were all killed in this great fire situation here, which is definitely a horrifying start to this thing here...and the exhaustion the girl is showing here suggests she was potentially also caught in the fire but was one of the only survivors. Well, on the whole just a really great choice of opening for this prologue here.
On the other side of the city, another young girl was also planning her next steps, although they had an altogether more pleasant tone to them. Cyrus was a girl of 15 and she was the princess of the city that was now being burned to the ground. The fire however, had stayed towards the west end of the city, the residential side, whereas the eastern side, the palace, was safe from harm because of the Yezran river that separated the two sides. Instead of worrying for the safety of her people, the always selfish Cyrus was flouncing around her room, her curled brown hair trailing after her, her bright green eyes alive with the joys and innocence of youthful gaiety. She was struggling to decide what to do next. Her father, King Mellios had given her the task of deciding who would be her prince when the time came to it. Of course she had three years to decide, so she wasn't all that worked up over it. Prince Regas of Naralad was one of the choices, though 5 years her senior, he was much dreamier than the other choice, a Prince Lang of the Southern Gate. However, despite the fact that she had two potential suitors, Cyrus was struggling to decide whether or not to meet her own choice of husband. Her thoughts wandered to the pretty gray eyes of the Royal Mystic who had captured her heart... Bartholomew.
Wow, that does not seem like a very nice princess at all, well, this looks to be a story with a pretty terrible ruler here judging by how little she cares about the burning of the city she's responsible for just because the fire is being contained in a way that it will not affect her palace. Definitely instantly going to make us readers hate this particular character with how she's acting.
And then of course there is that bombshell reveal there at the end that the queen seems to fancy the person that's just set fire to literally half the place that she rules over so that's a big concern there, certainly makes you wonder if the queen might even be in on the whole burning situation, well this is off to a very intriguing start here...certainly makes for quite an awesome prologue.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, a pretty solid prologue you've got here. It manages to tick pretty much all the boxes that you could expect from one of these here. At any rate, this definitely makes me want to read on and find out more.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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