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what an adorable little poem here ^-^
Some suggestions:
Don't capitalize everything. It's kind of the same with italics, they express something to be stressed, so if you use them everywhere, nothing becomes important. Also, I read caps in a shouting voice, so I was shouting this the whole time xD

Minor revision nitpicks:
"WRITING ON THE SAND AS I WAS GETTING BORE"
I think you mean "bored" here.

"SPENDING HOURS EVEN THE WEATHER WAS HOT"
There's just a few extra spaces between 'was' and 'hot'

"MY PRAYERS GOT ACCOMPLISHED"
This just doesn't flow right.
Try, "my prayers were ever answered" or something like that

"MY PRAYERS GOT ACCOMPLISHED TO MY JOY THERE WAS NO END"
Break this up.
"My prayers <were ever answered>,/
To my joy, there was no end"

"WHEN HE SAID YOU ARE MY FRIEND UMMM!! MORE THAN A FRIEND"
Some punctuation changes and added syllables to make the flow easier:
"When he said you are my friend,/
<Well>, umm...more than a friend!"

"WHICH MADE ME LOST IN HIS LOVE AND HE HUGGED ME TIGHTLY."
"Which made me lost in his love/
<As> he hugged me tightly"

The backslashes I use are just to make sure you know when to enter down, in case it doesn't show up right when I submit this review.
I kind of like how everything is clumped together; it adds to the effect that this is a 'madly-in-love' young woman who probably can't keep her thoughts straight.

Overall good job. Very cute:)
Oh, and welcome to YWS! Let me know if you need anything or have questions here!
Hope I helped

~iron.n
I revise not as a judge, but as a fellow writer eligible for judgment on the same level.

Wow, this could be much better with stanzas. Use (Shift + Return/Enter) to separate stanzas. The rest are pretty much fine. Now I only focus on this particular line. I'll make a few changes and you shall be able to apply them to the rest.

TO MY SURPRISE HE WAVED AND SAID HI

To my surprise he waved and said hi

To my surprise, he waved and said, "Hi,"

To my surprise, he waved at me and said, "Hi,"

To my surprise, he waved at me and beautifully said a, "Hi,"

To my surprise, he actually waved at me and beautifully said, "Hi,"

To my surprise,
he actually waved at me,
and beautifully said "Hi,"

To my surprise,
he actually waved at me,
and beautifully said "Hi,"
I could never have said goodbye.

To my surprise,
he actually waved at me,
and said "Hi,"
I couldn't say bye.

To my surprise,
he waved, it was nice,
he said, "Hi,"
I couldn't say bye.