Good one! The rhyming is up to mark, and so is the vocabulary usage and expression. It can't be anything but a hedgehog.......can it? Because you wrote that the coat is like needles, so......anyway, please tell what you meant it to be!
One thing you could change though : the line " His fat tail is like a shell wound", well, I don't think that's a good likeness you've used. Maybe you could replace the word or the lines.
Keep it up!
Mysticalxx
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