Hello there! Unknown391625 here with review!
First off, this is a depressing, dramatic poem. Seeing from your portfolio, you have written other poems. Nice job! So, I have only one nitpick with this. In the first line, you started a sentence, ended the line with a comma, and started the next line with the first letter capitalized of the first word. That is really my only nitpick with this. Everything else is great. It rhymes! It's just really simple and great! You have an a,b,a,b pattern going on! Not bad at all! I would like to see more of your works! Don't give up and always write, Kajka!
-Unknown391625
Happy review day!
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