Interesting... The poem seems to skip a bit, but I can tell that it all talks of the same thing. I don't understand the first stanza all to well though, but that might just be me. The last stanzas do make sense. Altogether I must say that, this being your first poem, it's not bad. Not bad at all. I hope you know, though, that not all poems need to rhyme. In fact, poems that "flow" but don't have the same sound feels, I don't know, good. That may just be me. Some of my favorite poems have no rhyme scheme whatsoever, and yet they are the ones that stick with me the most. Keep writing, keep practicing, and soon poetry will flow out of you. Use the pen (or in this case, the keyboard) as your medium. Don't force anything; *sings like Elsa* Let it flow! Good luck on future poetry!
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