Hi Snazzy!
Liberty500 is here to give you a review!
Let's get straight to it, shall we? Okay, so, you did a wonderful job with expressing your emotions towards America. It's pretty obvious that you want America to be a peaceful place. I absolutely love your choice of words, especially in these lines:
"What if America were a better place?
What if hatred were a disgrace?
What if there were no nationality?
Would we all be trapped?
Or would we all be free?
What if we all would get along?"
Basically half the poem. But you know what I mean! You have a wonderful vocabulary for this poem. In all your poems, actually.
You also did a great job with rhyming in every single line. So a big thumbs up on that. There was just one thing that I noticed. In the following line (the second last line):
"It up to you faith,"
I'm pretty sure you meant to have "It's" instead of "It". I'd love to see more poems like these in he future.
Keep on writing!
~Liberty500
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