This is Nikayla here dropping in for a review on Review Day for my favorite Lima Bean!
Time to start blabbing about the characters again right about...now.
My father was behind his desk pinching the bridge of his nose. “You’re telling me that the little skirmish you had last night reveals one of the worst wars we’ve had in years?”
I rubbed my bandaged shoulder, trying to cool the still burning skin with some compassion for myself. Energy flowed out of my hand and into the wound, stitching skin together and easing the pain. “Unfortunately…”
“And, of course, you’ve already volunteered to help."
I'm unsure if the energy flowing out of Kerani's hand is literal or metaphorical. Seems as if that is able to go either way, which is why I'm asking. The first sentence of the second paragraph is a little weird? Not sure how other people might feel on that.
Not sure if this'll change--I like Kerani's father so far. He's a little annoyed by her and the details that she reports, but generally he seems well-meaning? We'll see.
I left the room and, to distract myself, tried thinking of what in Janani’s name could be that strong. Fahir was unlikely, unless after a few centuries of war they’d invented a new tool that could circumvent Shira power in ancestral land recently folded back into the Shira family by marriage, instead of simply muddying our boarders. That was something the scholars along the bay would invent, not the horse and hunting obsessed province that was our closest neighbour.
Which meant the scholars could be involved. The kalisi fields had been far enough away from there, a few days’ ride and buffered by a border that had actually remained fairly strong, to the point someone in the family would’ve felt the invasion. Of course, that was under normal circumstances, and these were far from normal.
Might be me--I don't know who Janani is? At least, I'm saying that I probably forgot. I get the majority of the base information that's needed for the story but the details tend to scatter in whether or not I remember them. Remembering a world especially isn't my style, so forgive me if I'm misinformed about anything. That being said, there are mages in this world! I'm slowly picking up on that this is more fantastical than I originally assumed. I thought this might be a pure fantasy where the fantasy is in the nature and not in the hands of the characters.
Of course, I don't expect to see Kerani becoming a mage any time soon. Not like her character (at least, that's what I think from what's happened so far). The emotions and pressures that Kerani feels hit quite hard. We haven't seen her show stress or any heavy emotion before. Not like this anyway. I love her siblings and I love their support for her in this chapter. This scene is just--ugh. A little out of nowhere--not how I expected Kerani to react to all of this--and so strong at the same time.
The main part of this chapter that I am confused by (this chapter is pretty solid in direction) is actually Kerani's character herself. This is...a little out of the blue? I thought she'd be one to be a bit more 'stable' and harder to get to cry--not that crying is bad. Just. There's a shift between what her character is like and maybe this is because we're getting to know all the different sides of her. When she's with her friends or around her father and even when she's being intimate with another. What's weird is after this scene she's still like the raddest and strong female main character we knew before--just a different side of that character.
Lovely chapter, Rosey. I'm still having trouble understanding the world and the whole family ties and Rats (the start of this chapter could've been expanded on) but other that conversation with her father, this is solid as always. If you have any questions, don't be afraid to ask! I hope I helped and have a great day.
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