Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well this appears to be quite an interesting story here. Its definitely presenting quite a developed metaphor here for things and sort of painting a picture of what it can do to a person which is very useful to see.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Mom and dad were fighting again. That’s the third time today. I can tell it’s the last one of the night by the way mom is slurring her words and dad is getting quieter and quieter. My little brother hides in the corner of his room, where I find myself wrapped around him trying, with all my might, to shield him from the conflict. They were fighting about my older brother again; he’s been so out of control lately. See, my family is complicated. But it’s a different kind of complicated than you’re probably thinking. I can’t tell you their names. Not yet, anyway. Maybe along the way you can make up your own names for them, but for now you will just have to hear the story without knowing who these people are. Maybe to you they are the same people, or someone entirely different.
OKay...pretty interesting start that we got there...liking it so far...well..its not exactly a great situation there but its definitely doing a good job of catching your attention and the whole idea of how the names are playing a critical role somehow is also very mysterious and I love that too. Let's see where this goes.
My mother is pretty important to our family. She is the only one aloud out of the house because she is the only one that the neighbors want to see. She doesn’t cry, and she’s really good at smiling. Life is toughest for her though, because she’s never allowed to rest at home since all that happens inside that house is the constant war. She’s beautiful, and the way she carries such happiness is overwhelming to me sometimes. How is she so happy? Truth is she’s not, because at the end of the day she has to come back to us, she has to be torn apart again. And for what? She will have to put on the same smile before she leaves the house again and again and again. I’m always afraid that she is fading into my dad a bit too much, and day by day she won’t be as happy anymore. Until finally, when she leaves the house, people will be able to see what we have done to her. And they will try to help. She will want their help, but the funny thing is that the rest of us won’t let her get any. If she were to get help, they would try to kill my father and my brother, who don’t want to die. Of course, no one wants to die, but some people are willing to give up their lives for specific reasons.
Okay....well that got a little complicated there, had t read that a couple of times to get to the bottom of what they're trying to say there but once you do understand it...well...that is some dark stuff right there...oh dear. Looks like we're looking at a lot of metaphors or I don't see how this would genuinely make sense in real people...but umm...well its interesting...being forced to smile, having said smile ripped apart and then there being no help...well...let's see what the rest of the paragraphs here have to add...that might tell us more here.
My father is a well hidden person. He’s very reserved. In fact, some of my neighbors don’t know he lives here. Same scenario with my older brother, except he leaves more of a mark on this house than any of us. He is always tearing it apart and making it look like a disaster. He uses anything he can to cause that house damage. Why? It’s because my father ticks him off, and he is completely fine with it. In fact I think it makes him feel better when my brother tears the house apart. I really don’t know for sure though; my dad is really hard to understand.
Okay...well that appears to be more interesting facts...I am starting to sort of see this house as being the mind maybe somehow...I don't know...the way its going that's my best prediction so far...let's see where this ends up going before I make any more conclusive decisions here....
My younger brother is way different. He always wants to do the right thing, and he is deathly afraid of my dad and my older brother. He is always asking when mommy is coming home. He is so helpless; I try to take care of him the best that I can but there isn’t much I can do. He is sick. He is sick because my dad made him that way. I don’t know how or why, but it’s his fault. My younger brother can’t speak as loud as he used to, and he can’t do things on his own anymore. He’s fading away slowly but noticeably.
Okay...so that's even more interesting...but I am sort of getting a sense of things here...let's see where this takes us...I won't reveal anything until we get to the end or you just spell it out here.
And me? Well I’m just me. I live here; I don’t even think I play a role in this house. All I do is watch the things around me happen, and I can’t control it. I can’t make decisions in this house anymore because my dad will always shoot me down. He and my mom make them now. Sometimes my little brother will chime in when he can, but his opinion doesn’t matter as much as it used to.
Do you get the big picture yet? I hope so. Well I suppose you have a right to know these characters names. My mother’s name is Impression. My father’s name is Depression. My younger brother’s name is Emotion. And my older brother’s name is Addiction. And my name?
I am Corruption.
Oh welll...there's the big reveal...well I got a couple of things right...definitely the mother had something to do with happiness or something, managed to figure out addiction and depression...well....not to terrible...and a pretty neat set of metaphors that you've got here...I do like the ideas here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: At any rate, this is not a type of story I've seen too much before and it really is quite an interesting depiction of these various traits. Well...at any rate, that's all I've gotta say for now.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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