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The weirdo scientists and the submerged people: A graphic story starring Sims people.

by Blackwood


The weirdo scientists and the submerged people

I was extremely bored and decided to make something plain stupid. Uses screenshots I took from the Sims 2 game! Please enjoy.

Anyway, That was pretty fun to make. I took more pictures but they take quite a while to process so I'll save the for later. Personally I think I am terrible at doing the story/speech/text side of comics, even when they are supposed to be silly ones, so if anyone can suggest a better storyline to go on after that, go ahead.  I do have photos planned but I can take new ones.

I bet I made some spelling errors somewhere or another.


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Sun Aug 31, 2014 12:31 am
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First off I need to do one thing. Hahahaha! i'm sorry but when the two are surprised it looks like the most corniest cartoon where your groaning like " come on. really your that emotional?" but other than that comical release i liked your dialog and the outcome of this comic. don't know if the pose of the one that moved was on purpose but it sort of looked like he was doing the chicken dance to me. Now the blonde was funny in the last slide the pose you did reminded me of doctor evil rolling his hands laughing. I guess without repeating myself or losing thoughts again it was a great comic




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Sun Aug 31, 2014 12:27 am
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Hi there! It's me, Little Sister! This was really fun to read. It was funny, and I was smiling through all of it; that could just be because I like the Sims very much, though. You have no errors that I can see, but if anyone else sees any, that's great. The thing that bothers me, though, is that some pictures have color, while some are in brown, white, and black. That could be fixed, but if you don't have a problem with it, you don't have to. I liked it, and I bet a lot of other people will like it too.

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Sun Aug 31, 2014 12:25 am
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Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Happy Review Day! Let's see what we have here.

When I look at the part where the character are surprised, it just looks so corny. Just AH! XD If there were anyway that you could(I think it's hard to do this with Sims) make it not look like the way it does. Also in the last panel, would a real scientist say Lol? Do scientist talk like teenagers or are they more professional? I don't think this is in Sims but it would be cool if you could have had them frozen, so that it's realistic because there are actual people frozen in ice(as you may well know). You could have even had Walt Disney come out.

I really like the idea of this, I don't see any spelling mistakes and that's always good to not have. Your characters are quite realistic looking and I think that you had a lot of fun making this because it really expresses that in your work(that and you said so). Your grammar seems to be just fine that would be cool. I think that one story line that you could take is the one where the person inside that suit is some famous person like Bill Gates or Walt Disney or even Hitler and they have to help them get used to the world or if it is Hilter, what to do with him. Overall, great job. I think that if you tell me when the next comic comes out I would be sure to review it. This is an awesome idea and I really just want to read more. Have a nice review day. Keep calm and keep writing.

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