Hey there! Let me assemble my thoughts on this... Okay
I read the poem thrice to make sure I did not miss out on anything. That said, it seemed to me that the poem talks about the Earth's environment and its exploitation. The idea isn't anything new or different, but it was, nevertheless, an interesting read. The punctuation and the enjambment are pretty tidy, the flows okay. So, no nitpicks there.
The point where I really get the hang of the poem is the last part of the second stanza, where you've described the silhouettes of building as claws and used clouds as a metaphor for something. It is almost as if the clouds are made of cotton and the pointed skyscrapers are tearing them apart. That's quite an image. Something that makes me think.
The last stanza is the icing — almost a warning : the Earth will crumble if we continue to exploit it, it does not owe us anything. Whoa.
So, overall, good job. I believe I've read some of your earlier works too and I really like the way you write. Just keep them poems coming.
Regards
S
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