Young Writers Society

Hey Persy, I seen you posted something and I had to come see. I like it alot but I just didn't find this work to be subpar with your other works.

of reminders
that I am here and now
and

You're baaaaaack! :O *fan squeals*

I'm with @Booshian on this one, when I read it, I got more of a sense of sadness/depression configured as a monster/life-form that is growing inside the speaker. A lot of reviewers don't get the connection of the title to the poem, but I think that "chewing" actually explains in a much more vivid, concrete manner the idea of "anxiety"/"uncertainty". It very much does feel like something is chewing, and I think there's an idiom or expression too that says like oh, let me chew on it. // it's gnawing at me, it's chewing at me. I think gnawing fits better with the idea. Chewing is kind of cutesy, but I kind of like cutesy. Oh, decisions, decisions.

Did not like the break of the last line in the second stanza. The double it's on that penultimate line in that stanza also bug me. All of the other breaks though, I found very interesting. Also loved the last line about the eating. Errrugugh, this one is very tight. Very nice. Love.

~ as always, Audy

This was amazing. I loved every line. It flowed really well and made me feel the pain and anticipation of life in every letter. Really well done, thank you for sharing this with the rest of us.

I love the vagueness, I think that leaves it open to more personal interpretation.
To me, I get the impression this was written in a time of great uncertainty and you wish that this "growth" will tell you which "direction" to go, in life I assume?. Or maybe this thing is a metaphor for anxiety or depression as you conveyed a sense of building pressure with the repetition of the word "wait" you may be waiting for something unforeseen something you're afraid of. That was my interpretation anyway. As for the title I can't really make any connection. But it is unusual which I found eye catching. I really did enjoy this though, reminded me a lot of Plath, her darker poems like elm - "I am inhabited by a cry nightly it flaps out with its hooks looking for something to love" if that's the subject matter direction you were going, I loved it.

This is an interesting poem, although I dont exactly understand it. I get the "more than I am accounted for part" as the writer believes that another life-form is growing in your chest.... Oh I get it now!!. I think. Is it about carrying a child? If so very clever. Im luaghing at myself now XD. Anyways, I think that this poem could benefit from some restructuring. If I may " as they go along their buisness and it doesnt eat me" should be two different sentences, and so should
"Despite the assurance that I am here and now" and "I have five fingers" should be seperate. I would also suggest that you revise, "to go to" in the second paragraph. Besides that good job. And sorry about the confusion, ive been thinking about schizophrenia and word salad ha ha. But Ill leave you alone now to reflect on your effective writing style and keep writing.