Hey fortis! Scarli here to review your poetry!
I meant to review this ages ago, but I forgot. Now that's I've found it again, I'ma get right to that. ^^
Wow, Fortis. This is pretty dreamy, fantasy-like, and I think it really works. I don't know why, but I get the feeling of secrets and adventure and love when I read this. It's kind of cute, but also sad. I also get the feeling this is specifically about a boy? I don't know if I'm reading that or not, but anyways. I love it! The imagery is reall nice, from the being held up to the light, to the princess in disguise, to the clouds and rain, to the angels with short hair and the coloured threads and shadows, to the petals falling. The imagery is beautiful and sad, and a little bittersweet, too, but that's okay, because it's still a beautiful poem. <3
As for nitpicks, did you mean to put the apostrope in sparkling? Or was that an accident? If it was on purpose, ignore this. If not, you might want to fix that. Other than that, I haven't got anything else to add, so yeah. Lovely poem, and I'm definitely gonig to hit that like button when I've hit submit!
Remember; keep it up and never stop writing!
~Scar. <3
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