Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!!
First Impression: Well, this was certainly a pretty interesting little story here...not too much happening but it definitely presents a pretty interesting little scene this one. Well more details down below.
Anyway let's get right to it,
He awoke, opened his eyes wearily, and sat up.
The room was gray, like normal, and the light from passing cars made him dizzy as they swept across the room in strips from behind the blinds. The clock glared a red "5:30" at him.
Hmm...okay that's a pretty decent spot to start this review off at...certainly sets the scene for the story quite well as far as the setting is concerned and it looks like a general morning here by the looks of it, seems like a pretty normal setting and a pretty realistic take on things here, its not the most exciting start to a story but its certainly not boring either so let's see where this is going.
He tugged on his jeans, patting the pockets to make sure his wallet was still there from yesterday, and sniffed a few shirts before he found a maroon one that smelled relatively clean.
Well that's certainly adding a lot to what kind of person this might be and what sort of situation he may be in, judging by the fact that it appears that he doesn't seem to care too much about the clothes he wears...certainly adds a lovely bit of detail into this.
The bathroom light flickered on, washing the man in a sickly glow, making his skin seem yellow and greasy. It was. He forgot to wash his face last night, and he wiped rheum from the corner of his eyes, scrunching up his nose.
Well he certainly looks to be in terrible shape there, you can tell he was out last night for a loong time, and is probably used to that somewhat, maybe...judging by how he seems to just be taking things in stride rather than being surprised at the state that he is in.
He shaved precisely, getting close enough to the mirror to taste his own stale alcohol breath. He was regretting it now, but the woman said she was a feminist, and bought him drinks instead of the other way around. It was strange, but he hadn't minded the free beers at the time.
Hmm...well he's definitely going to regret having the one too many free beers but hmm...precisely shaving is a very interesting detail to show his character again..it contrasts a bit with the not so clean t shirts but alright, well let's see what these memories are going to be like, they certainly also seem really interesting.
Her hair had been long and dark, tied back in a braid, and she wore lots of necklaces. He didn't think she was wearing any makeup, but she was pretty anyway, her freckles collected on the bridge of her nose and spilling across her cheekbones.
Hmm...well he certainly seems to be remembering her quite well despite the hangover, that would certainly make for a very interesting detail there, cause someone has to make quite an impression to be remembered in quite that much detail through a hangover.
He shaved the area over the brilliant bruise on his jaw carefully, though not carefully enough to avoid wincing. He knew he deserved it, but he wished that violence hadn't been the first line of defense. The boys would never let him hear the end of it at work today.
Well...that seems like justified violence at any rate...oh dear...well...quite a surprising ending there...but all very realistic for sure...this story definitely sticks very true to how a situation like this would play out in real life
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, this is a pretty neat little story, a little snapshot of a potentially bad day in someone's life this one.....well at any rate, not too much for me to really say here. Soo...until next time.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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