Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Hmm...well that definitely sounds like the edge to someplace crazy although I do believe that is not the Tartarus I'm familiar with, you wouldn't be able to stand at the edge of that one, it sucks you in. At any rate, this seems like a really interesting story and I certainly liked the ending there....hopeful happy endings like that are always gonna be my favorite.
Anyway let's get right to it,
The drop below her seemed to continue on forever; and endless abyss that had no visible end. To some, this abyss is frightening on unimaginable levels. But to others, it's as if the darkness is luring them in. After all, why not take the easy way out if you have the opportunity?
Well...that's not the greatest of signs...and ever increasing drop into the darkness sounds like a recipe for something that would be pretty sad there..oh dear, well this is certainly off to an interesting start at any rate....certainly creating a really interesting visual there right at the start.
She could see the tunnel in the opposite direction leading out into the light which also looked tempting, but she knew all too well how deceiving that light really was. Suppose the key to everything was to no longer feel. No longer feel joy and the immense pleasures of life. No longer feel love or hate. But above all, no longer feel the excruciating pain of simply existing. So she stood there a while, not really thinking anything at all; just standing on the edge of the abyss wanting so badly to give into it; to not feel, but something held her back. There was a nagging at the back of her head telling her to look back one more time at the light behind her, but she held her ground.
Okay...staying in the abyss over choosing to go back to living a life...well that is certainly a very dangerous statement there....oh gosh....well...I would think so anyway, preferring to stay in the abyss and thinking that is the best way forward is certainly not something most people tend to do at any rate. And the way she describes simply existing as an excruciating pain, well this is sending some really crazy thoughts through my head at any rate...cause I'm imagining all sorts of horrible this might mean...hmm...I should probably avoid overthinking things here.
Briefly she wondered about the many people before her who stood at this exact spot, if they decided to jump and if so, whether they were still falling or they had hit the bottom somehow. The only way to know was to jump herself. She knew all to well there was no going back if she moved her feet even the slightest bit of the ledge. It was bittersweet perhaps but it seemed like the best alternative. So much so, that it was like it was the only alternative.
Yeah, this is definitely seeming like its headed towards something that's going to end in some sadness here, her calling it bittersweet is an interesting move...at any rate it looks like someone that has led quite a difficult life here, and it appears that she's trying to run away from it somehow....the fact that she mentions the choice in front of the hole here is something a lot of people have to make is definitely adding even more fun things to here...hmm...well let's see how this goes I suppose.
She was decided then, she was going to let complete and utter darkness suck her in but she would look back once, and only once. So she turned and her eyes moved along the long, narrow platform that eventually led to the light and she saw it. She saw everything and everyone, all the people who were searching for her and calling her name. She knew that if she were to make her way back to the light, the journey would seem endless and she would be all alone. It might be even more painful than the journey it took to get to where she was standing now. Despite that, she told herself it was worth it; it hadto be. So she moved forward, slowly inching towards the promise of warmth and happiness, trying not to look back and she could still feel the dark abyss trying to drag her back as she continued forward.
Ooohh...okay...that's a good twist there....things turning back towards the light there, gotta say I wasn't expecting to see that considering how hard things were being leaned towards the darkness in that particular story there. But well..this is a hopeful ending here, she makes the choice to look back one last time and that manages to convince here that it is the path that she should be taking and well...her attempting to make it towards that side at the very end makes a pretty awesome ending there.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, pretty interesting little story that you've got here, it certainly seems to have a lot more beneath the surface than just what this here is trying to tell us...I don't think I will analyze that too much, but this almost seems like someone that was contemplating suicide for a moment before they were turned away by a memory of some sort...well its the kind of read I got on this situation at any rate.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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