Young Writers Society

This was very funny.You took a enforcement poster and turned it into a lively song. That's called sheer brilliance my friend.I loved the you turned it into rebellion against said poster.This shows that you are your own person.My favorite part was the Doggy Poo Nazi.I like that you used the word poo instead of a curse word.That shows that you have respect for the younger readers.Good luck!!!!

My sister and I just read it. It's funny and I now believe in the Dog Poo Fairy. You should make a religion called Dog Pooism. Be sure to have a lot of dogs come into wherever you hold your D.P. meetings! I BELIEVE IN THE DOG POO FAIRY!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hello @TakeThatYouFiend!

Before I review, I have to say when I read that you got this idea from nothing but a little slogan, I knew that you have some good experience in writing and know where to look. Great job! But no matter how much experience you have, tweaks are needed. For example,

It really is true what Peter Pan has said,

or else where would the dog poos go?

Hello, and happy review day!

Oh my gosh! This is hilarious! The rhythm mostly works, except for the few spots that the previous reviewer pointed out. I like the repetition of the line "for each time you pick up a dog poo then a dog poo fairy dies." You could tape this up over one of the posters that you mentioned and make someone's day a bit funnier.

Something I noticed: I feel like the last stanza isn't really necessary. You already said everything in it before, so it doesn't bring any new ideas. I think that it would be fine if you stopped at the end of the fifth stanza. You can go out with the repetition. I feel that the last stanza takes away from the rest of the poem.

A few other little nitpicks:

It really is very true what Peter Pan has said

It is really very true what Peter Pan has said

Hey there Fiend! Here as requested

Happy review day!

You certainly haven't made this easy for me to review, because it's such a great poem. It has the rhyme, and the rhythm to match with it as well. At some points there are words I wanted taken away or added in there, but I didn't want to mess with the rhythm. So, I'll point those places out and maybe there is a way to rephrase it for the better. I also liked the idea of having a rather obscure type of fairy to believe in there as well

But just you think, when you pick up poo, of the dog poo fairy's demise,

for each time you pick up a dog poo then a dog poo fairy dies.

There must be a dog poo fairy,

or else where do the dog poos go?

It really is very true what Peter Pan has said

when you don't believe in fairies then a fairy drops down dead.

each time you pick up a dog poo then a dog poo fairy dies

you pick it up in a plastic bag to add it to landfill.

My goodness....this just put a huge smile on my face. It then evolved into a grin, and then i burst out in bubbles of laughter.
Your creativity! The childishness! It brings happiness to those who read this. The ridiculous belief of dog poo fairies was a hilarious idea portrayed perfectly into a humorous piece of work. The rhyming of each line was entertaining, and each stanza was perfect. As though a child who believed in dog poo fairies wanted to speak out loud.

"I believe in the dog poo fairy!

I have a right to my freedom of speech!"

When it rhymed perfectly, I couldn't help but laugh. It was funny and enjoyable. Childish, creative and lifted my spirits up. I just... don't know how to explain, but this was incredibly delightful. Short, sweet and amusing.


~Nifoi