Ohhhh, Haikus.
I don't know much about haikus.
But, these are really good. I like how you took certain elements from nature, and constructed some really beautiful poems. My favourite is Swans, simply because it describes swans so beautifully, I mean, they can be vicious creatures, but most people see them as peaceful and calm. You have done that well.
I don't really feel as if I should critique these because of my limited knowledge of haikus.
But, one thing I would be careful of is what fortis said, the limited information I've been told about haikus is that the end juxtaposes with the start. You sort of hint at that with
Autumn, talking about ending, but that is only hinted at.
But, of course, I would take what I say with a grain of salt.
They are really good, and haikus are hard to do, which is why I've never attempted to do them.
Good job and keep writing
Nargles xxx
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