The Reality Syndrome

by Pompadour

Published March 23, 2014

In The Reality Syndrome

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"My tears hang from the ceiling
like false stars that could fall
any time now."

AN INTRODUCTION OF SORTS:

STARS AND CORPSES


It starts with the sky.

Or the stars in the sky, to be more precise.

Humanity has always been fascinated by stars; by the constellations they form and the stories they weave. They tell you that stars are blazing balls of gas; a wildfire in the heavens. Looking at a star is like looking back in time, past eons of bursting energy and creation. Stars are snide, sly things, and it is they who give the sky character.

"The sky is alive," you say?

The sky is dead.

If you are looking for a logical explanation to the aforementioned statement, then I am afraid you have come to the wrong person. I deal with the facts, and the facts alone. They may be warped, twisted, distorted in unimaginable ways, but facts they shall forever remain. Think of it as a game. I hurl the bricks at you, and you catch. How does that sound? You're up for it?

Wonderful! On with the lesson, then.

Wait -- you don't know why you're here? Codswallop! Nobody knows why they're here. They just are. Now, if you've finished with your idiotic questions, allow me to introduce myself:

My name is Reality. I live within you and around you. To some people, I do not exist. I am simply a way of life, and you have accepted me in your ignorance. There is much more to me than you narrow-minded humans will ever know! Much more, in fact, than I will be able to teach you in the following lessons of betrayal, lust and worldliness. I can tell you tales of lies and deception; war and death. I am a prism, a polygon, a shape with many faces. A double-edged sword. Putting up with me is like putting up with a parade of paper-cuts and bruises. It is no surprise to me, then, that mankind prefers to accept Death instead of befriending me. Death is predictable. He comes and goes, but only once in a person's life. Reality, on the other hand, is the epitome of unpredictability.

So here is a lesson for you:

All stars unite to form a corpse.

Think of people as stars. I see them die everyday. I see their fellow humans weep and wallow in their despair. It's laughable, sometimes, the way they smile their last smiles and say their last, cheesy words. Sometimes, they even verge on the edge of being nauseating, and that's when I don't bother to stay long enough to see their souls fly. But, ah, it is so very beautiful when they do. Imagine opalescent fireworks and curtains of crystallized laughter enshrouding a decaying corpse. A velvety casket of billowing smoke that rises around them. But it is the souls of the dead that attract my attention the most: some souls are like withering feathers; scratchy and pitch-black. Other souls are all plume and pomp, but empty inside. But it is the laughing souls that make me cry, and it is their bravery that I admire and like best. I even feel sorry for all the pain I made them go through, whilst they were among the living. I can't help but wonder what the fate of those departed souls is, though, and what happens to them.

It isn't my job to know.

My job is to teach humankind it's lessons. My job is to lead up to your death, in a world that is already dead. My job is simple. It is your job that is difficult; a cumbersome task, indeed.

Your job is to Believe. To love Him and fear Him.

Let's come back to square one. That is, stars and corpses. The sky is a graveyard. When you look up at the sky, you are looking up at a world whose inhabitants are already dead. It is an illusion; a relic of a long-buried past. You cannot see death itself; the ashes, the explosions that caterwaul in the almost palpable vacuum of space.

You cannot see death. Nor can you see the living among the dead.

There is life in death.

Am I confusing you? I apologize, most profusely and profoundly. It is all right if you were unable to follow my lecture, since I shall be summing up this entire session anyway.

Chalk it down:

~*Whatever I have told you, here and in the lessons that follow
is not a story. It is happening around you, and in your head.
Remember, I deal with facts. You catch.
It's like a ball game.
Let's revise once, shall we?
The sky is a graveyard.
The earth is a canvas.
Your deeds are the chalk with which you write
on the chalkboard.
And that chalkboard is you.
I am Reality. I am cold and cruel.
I love you and hate you, and you despise me all the same.
I exist because.
You put up with me, even if it is
against your wishes.
I am around you,
within you, and nowhere at all.
You cannot see me.
But I see you.*~

The sails are shifting. The compass points due north. The wind embraces you, and your next challenge hearkens to you like a long forgotten melody. You can hear the sirens singing.

The scene fades out.

Everything is black.

And then all is white.

A gong rings in the distance. Pull up a chair. You can hear the scraping and the shuffling of feet, of chairs being pulled out and papers being arranged. This is life's classroom. Before you is a blackboard, and chalked on its ebony surface are the words:

Welcome to Lesson One.


A/N: This might have several grammatical errors, since I just typed this down and haven't had the time to proofread as yet. I thought I would put it up, and only continue if it's worth it.

Cheers!

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GoldFlame
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GoldFlame wrote a review Review · Mar 30, 2014

Hey, Pompadour!

I've been waiting for something like this for the longest time. Something that tackles philosophy. Something that doesn't drone on about life and love and friendship and Theseus's ship.

And not just unique, but a breath of fresh air. All anyone sees nowadays is action, romance, depressing stuff, and action. The philosophy books have almost transformed into autobiographies. You've even managed to stitch some humor through your priceless patchwork, glaze and garnish, paint a drawing I wouldn't've touched in fear of ruining it. In other words ... wow. Wow.

Okay, so if I can be crazy for one second (who am I kidding? All writers are crazy.)...

Your introduction reminded me of this quote:

“A story beats with the heart of every person who has ever strained ears to listen. On the breath of the storyteller, it soars. Until its images and deeds become so real you can see them in the air, shimmering like oases on the horizon line ... It can vanish like smoke before the wind. Linger like perfume in the nose. Change with every telling, yet always remain the same.” – Cameron Dokey


Sorry for the huge chunk. Once it lost a few pounds, it decided it liked where it was and refused to diet any more. But reality and stories are very much similar. Flexible, on the exterior. But on the interior ... it's a whole other story. Dull. Cold. Because all of the stories that we pen reflect some story an ancestor also ... quilled. So this piece's paradoxical; its uniqueness contradicts reality's reality. In a way, it brings balance to the atmosphere. Um, that was far more than a second, wasn't it?

Speaking of atmosphere ...

It shifted several times throughout the piece. Now, I'm all for atmosphere-shifting, especially when it's executed subtly, but things do, to some degree, have to remain consistent.

For instance:

Codswallop! Nobody knows why they're here. They just are.


... and then ...

Imagine opalescent fireworks and curtains of crystallized laughter enshrouding a decaying corpse. A velvety casket of billowing smoke that rises around them.


The beginning was all enigmatic, and now I'm facing humor, the laugh-out-loud type, and now I'm facing enigmaticness--enigma?--and breathtaking descriptions again. (Did I compliment you on your descriptions already? If not, fabulous job. Amazing. Can you be any more of a better writer? No, don't answer that. Don't scare me with your inhuman skills.)

Stay true to your beginning. That's the unspoken rule between prose-writers. Actually, scratch that, because it has been spoken several times ...

But I don't feel too strongly about it. I probably should say that I do, to get you motivated or something, but honestly, this is a great piece, and I wouldn't recommend changing it at all. Just some technical stuff to take care of, and I'll conclude the review :D.

Stars are snide, sly things, and it is they who give the sky character.

The sky is dead.


These two contradict each other. It's probably me being obtuse, though ... I tend to do that, or be that.

Humanity has always been fascinated by stars; by the constellations they form and the stories they weave. They tell you that stars are blazing balls of gas; a wildfire in the heavens.


Semicolons' sole purposes are connecting independent clauses and separating items in lengthy lists. They're being underworked here. Exchange each one for a comma or colon.

Welcome to Lesson One.


This ending's a little melodramatic for my taste. Now, I'll admit, I consider everything melodramatic, but it doesn't suit the mood. Or maybe it's just me rambling.

Anyway, keep it up! Looking forward to hearing more from you! :D

I wanted to review this story. But I have very little to say after this awesome review! :D

Aw, thanks!

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BluesClues
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BluesClues wrote a review Review · Mar 25, 2014

So first let me say what made me like it so much:

1. The narrative voice. I like that you personified an abstract idea, reality, and gave it a voice and thoughts and a personality and even interests.

2. The philosophical aspects. Specifically, I like the comparison between reality and death, and the fact that death, visiting everyone as he does just once (at least directly, just once), is predictable. Most people would argue that death is largely unpredictable--he takes who he will, when he will, and you never quite know when he's coming for you--yet the way you talk about this, it makes sense to say that death is predictable.

3. The classroom set-up. I like that Reality is trying to teach us something--or some things--his manner (her manner?) of setting it up, and the lecture summary, if you will.

The only itsy-bitsy nitpick I have is in this line:

"Let's revise once, shall we?"

I think instead of "revise" you either meant "revisit" or "review," as what follows this line is the "lecture summary," that is, what Reality has been telling us summed up in a sort of quicknotes thing. I chalk this up to the fact that you say you were typing this up late at night.

I think the main reason I don't have suggestions to make yet is that I don't know where this is going. Hopefully you'll keep up with it and write more of it, because I realize you said you just kind of typed it up spur-of-the-moment and so maybe you're not sure where it's going yourself. No plot has yet unfolded, and the only characters introduced thus far are Reality and the reader (or at least, we could say the reader has been introduced because Reality talks directly to "you").

Which is not to say that that's a problem, because it's really interesting so far. But that's why I don't have anything to say about "here's how you could improve the plot," "here's how you could develop this character."

Let me know if you post more, because I'd definitely keep reading if this was the opening of a book I picked up in a bookstore.

Blue

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Astronaut
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Astronaut wrote a review Review · Mar 24, 2014

Hello! Dominusatramentum here!

Wow. I really loved this. It was very Book Theif-esque. It's so good that I find it extremely difficult to review, in fact I am only reviewing for two reasons: I really want you to continue, and I love cookies.

Let's get started, shall we?

One thing you might want to change is when you say that the narrator is Reality. You say it pretty early on, taking away some of the mystery. For example, I will use the Book Thief again (really, your story is quite similar to it, yet still very original). Zusak announces about halfway through the book that the narrator is Death. But straight from the beginning, we knew that the narrator was something abstract. It left us guessing, making sure we kept reading. If the narrator had been revealed on the first page, some people might have gotten a bit bored, and put the book down.

I liked the philosophical way you compared Reality to Death. If you asked anyone which they preferred, they would say reality, in a heartbeat. But the way you described it, Death seems to be the lesser of two evils, which is a difficult thing to do.

"Sometimes, they even verge on the edge of being nauseating" I don't quite understand this. Why? You went from the souls being laughable to nauseating with little transition. I think you might want to explain.

That's really all I have to say. Great job, and I hope you continue!

Cookies. I'll get to it the moment school lets out. ;)

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thestraycat
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thestraycat commented Comment · Mar 23, 2014

Hey, Pompadour
I really admire the way you use words to unravel your imagination. I am surprised that you didn't even had the time to proofread this and yet it came out almost a masterpiece. It is deep, philosophical, but does not fail to make the readers understand the point you are getting at. All I can say is...well done!



In short, Mrs. Pontellier was beginning to realize her position in the universe as a human being, and to recognize her relations as an individual to the world within and about her.
— Kate Chopin, The Awakening