Hey! I suck at reviewing articles/essays, but I'll try my best here.
I found a nitpick that you should fix:
She is a respected personality
She has a respected personality.
Okay, so since the main goal of this is to inform the reader, I won't talk about normal story elements, like imagery or figurative language. I think you did a really nice job with giving simple details about Erica with clear diction and easy to understand information. Your sentences were structured in a neat and orderly fashion, and your paragraphs were spaced out nicely. Nothing was too bulky or too short.
I do think you ended this flatly, as the last paragraph does not look like a concluding paragraph. Perhaps consider weaseling a small conclusion in there, one that reiterates the main point of this essay, and perhaps includes a bit more about Erica's personal life, most preferably current information.
Other than that, this was an easy to read essay/article, with a clear flow, straight to the point information, and a lot of details about her achievements. Nice work! ^^
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