This is Nikayla here dropping in for a review on Review Day!
You asked for this. I'm not addicted to this poem, that's for sure, younger Adri. Seems like this follows the usual cliche of having the 'Bad Guy' in literature and in this case, poetry, always be evil and without a real motivation. That's what I dislike so much about this poem. That the speaker shows no real motivation or reasoning behind their actions, and without that, I don't see how this poem can succeed.
There's no way that the reader can find any sympathy for the speaker if they're acting this way without reason. It's also just generally corny and I know that you can do better than this from experience. The structure could be made interesting but as of now, it's not and won't be because you haven't done anything to hook the reader in to the rest of the piece.
We have no motivation ourselves to try and be on the same wavelength as the speaker here. You only win with getting your theme across if you intended for it to be that all villains are EVIL and BAD and can never be redeemed of their actions. Maybe next time, younger Adri. If you do have any questions, don't be afraid to ask. I hope I helped and have a great day.
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