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A Pandamonium Extravaganza

by MasterGrieves


A theoretical exploration of the mind

A cute teddy bear so rare to find

But such a discovery has changed my life

Especially since I met him when I also met my wife

A cuddly sensation when I grasp him near

So warm, so soft, I have nothing to fear

He is my sentinel, and he is also my girl's

I am just so glad he entered this world


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Fri Jan 17, 2014 12:35 am
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I quite enjoyed the warm sentiment of this poem. It forces a vision of meeting your future wife on the midway of some carnival, falling in love and winning her a stuffed panda. And the use of the panda as a security blanket for both you and your wife speaks volumes on the strong bond the panda created. This was well crafted and full of sweet allegory and plenty of thought provoking imagery. Especially with the first line; "A theoretical exploration of the mind." It makes me wonder if there's more to the panda than I made it out to be. Good work, making me think and everything!




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-Monium is reviewing-

Heggo Harry! I know you are writing this about me, this is lovely. Thank you.

-BloodinkSeesFootage reviewing -

Hey! XD

A theoretical exploration of the mind - This is a very profound line *giggles*

A cute teddy bear so rare to find - D'aww. That is very complimentary. :)

But such a discovery has changed my life - Oooh, Monium has had quite the impact this line reveals. :)

Especially since I met him when I also met my wife - DAS ME!XD D'aww. -hugs-

A cuddly sensation when I grasp him near - He loves it when you do that. So do I. :D

So warm, so soft, I have nothing to fear - He is very protective.

He is my sentinel, and he is also my girl's - I am your girl. XD Awwwwwww. :)

I am just so glad he entered this world - Ditto. :)

This was a lovely piece.

You could us punctuation at some point you know, though. :P

Love youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

xoxoxoxoxoxxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxxooxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxxooxxoxoxo

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This is sweet.

A perfect representation of the heart of poetry. I like that it is short and sweet, but you use enough big words to keep it from being childish. And who doesn't like soft teddy bears?

This poem, in my view, is a fine piece of fine art, something I would want to hang on my wall.

I enjoyed reading it very much.

Thank you 567ajt!





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