Young Writers Society

Hello Fiend, Subtle here for a review on this fine day! I must say, this poem took my breath away! The imagery is stunning, and in terms of grammatical mistakes. There were none, nunno. And for some reason, you have managed to rhyme this poem seamlessly and at the same time making it flow so well. And I also love your language! Is very Dickenson-like. Now, let's point out some of my favourites.

A stream winds through this wonderland,

lapping past the ancient trees.

Earthen smells excite the nostril,

floating on the silken breeze.

I was transported directly to a beautiful Garden of Eden.

The words you've chosen aren't fancy, by any means, but they fit just right with the feel of the poem and, like I said, transport you to the place. I can feel the sun on my face and the grass under my feet, and I wish I was there.

I also like that it has the traditional ballad feel to it, as if it was a song. It has a good beat to it, and almost all of the lines have the correct number of syllables to keep the flow going.

All in all, a good poem.

Thank you TakeThatYouFiend!

YOUR. POEM. IS BEAUTIFUL. I... I don't know what to say, I... I've never even READ such perfect poetry on this website before. I've always been able to find SOME little discrepancy, like rhythm problems or rhyme inconsistencies or lack of punctuation or misspellings or grammar mistakes, but I am struck speechless. It's like God himself just dropped this in my lap, to prove a point about my criticism of others while I have no real poetry skills myself. MY LIFE IS CHANGED.