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You are now cursed. You must send this on or you will be killed. Tonight at 12:00am, by Bloody Mary. This is no joke. So don't think you can quickly get out of it and delete it now because Bloody Mary will come to you if you do not send this on. She will slit your throat and your wrists and pull your eyeballs out with a fork. And then hang your dead corpse in your bedroom cupboard or put you under your bed. What's your parents going to do when they find you dead? Won't be funny then, will it? Don't think this is a fake and it's all put on to scare you because your wrong, so very wrong. Want to hear of some of the sad, sad people who lost their lives or have been seriously hurt by this email?
CASE ONE - Annalise [Surname Removed] he got this email. Rubbish she thought. She deleted it. And now, Annalise dead.
CASE TWO - Louise [Surname Removed]: She sent this to only 4 people and when she woke up in the morning her wrists had deep lacerations on each. Luckily there was no pain felt, though she is scarred for life.
CASE THREE - Tommy [Surname Removed]: He sent this to 5 people. Big mistake. The night Thomas was lying in his bed watching T.V. The clock shows '12:01am'. The T.V misteriously flickered off and Thomas's bedroom lamp flashed on and off several times. It went pitch black, Thomas looked to the left of him and there she was, Bloody Mary standing in white rags. Blood everywhere with a knife in her hand then disappeared. The biggest fright of Thomas's life.
Warning... NEVER look in a mirror and repeat - 'Bloody Mary. Bloody Mary.' Bloody Mary... I KILLED YOUR SON' Is it the end for you tonight! YOU ARE NOW CURSED
We strongly advise you to send this email on. It is seriously NO JOKE. We don't want to see another life wasted. ITS YOUR CHOICE... WANNA DIE TONIGHT? If you send this email to...
NO PEOPLE - You're going to die.
1-5 PEOPLE - You're going to either get hurt or get the biggest fright of your life.
5-15 PEOPLE - You will bring your family bad luck and someone close to you will die.
15 OR MORE PEOPLE - You are safe from Bloody Mary
Please guys don't let me die ... I don't want you to die or me to die...Please share it on any social networking site and get more than 15 likes or shares or comments. Right now, I need it. Please help me. Please.
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Don't worry! This is a chain mail that's been passed around since I was a wee little Snoinklet.
I think I saw it around about... I want to say about 12 years ago? I didn't pass it on, and I haven't died yet, so have faith!
Also, if it helps, this might give you some hope.
Anyway, I'm going to lock this, since this work wasn't written by you.
Knight Dragon, here to review!
Technical:
There should be a comma after Tonight, and 12:00am should be "12:00 a.m."
Did you mean "closet," or is this a non-American term? I'm not too familiar with the British/Canadian usage of cupboard (which I shall be investigating post-review).
That "What's" should actually be "What are" for proper subject+verb agreement.
Typos there. You forgot your colon after the close-bracket, and "he" should be "she."
No pain period? Or no pain when her wrists were cut? That's not very clear.
You forgot a period after your "V," and you misspelled mysteriously.
That period felt weird to read there, but if you changed it to a comma, then that'd be one really long sentence.
What does that even mean there? You know what's really funny? I'm single and have no children. That sentence means nothing to me.
There's no period at the end.
You need an apostrophe in "ITS", so it reads "IT'S."
Your counting system is off. It should be 1-4 people and 5-14 people. Also, the threats are really threatening. So if I tell one person I'm going to get really hurt or scared, but if I tell five people then someone close to me dies and my family has bad luck? I'd be more motivated to only tell one person, then. I can take the pain, and what if Bloody Mary only chooses to scare me? Then I spared someone's life who I'm really close to, and I only got a good Slenderman scare.
I just finished saying "Bloody Mary" to the nearest mirror twelve times (one for each Doctor) and I'm fine.
Hope this helps!
Ok, I'm not here to criticize you but you should really know that these death chain mail has no scientific proofs that it works. Just search it up on Google and you will see. Actually, better yet let me prove it to you. I'm just going to sit here, and I'm still going to be fine tomorrow.
Because, this is about the fifth time I've done this since receiving these ridiculous chain mails. Honestly, you re going to be finie. No deaths, no bloody Mary.
Hehe, I do not believe any of us will let you die. Well at least... I shall not!
HAVE NO FEAR OSSUM IS HERE!!!
*hides behind you while you stare into the mirror*