Pony123 here to review! Happy review day. You have a great poem here! I like the simplicity, the imagery, all the things needed to have a good poem. You have just a few grammatical errors.
"Help me god" should be "Help me God" as you always capitalize that even if you aren't Christian.
I also had some problems with the word "Quietude" It kind of breaks the spell of the poem, try to change that.
Over all, nice poem.
Pony123
Wow, this poem is brilliant! 
I love the formatting and flow of everything, and I've never thought of the South in this way. I'll never look at it the same way again. I like the ending especially, the part with "etc." and where you used the word "quietude" - is that even a real word? Anyway, thanks for writing this, it really did make my day - not exaggerating.
Ha Ha! How ingenious! Posting a picture to keep the formatting. Nice.
And good poem too. I feel like you described this countryside life really well. ^^
You have played wiv the language really well here.
I love the way the poem looks on the paige.
As for the subject matter, I enjoyed the idea of this being about things connecting with nature.
Or at least, this is what I took from it with the referenes to wind and stuff.
very good writing, interesting idea with the format.
Overall, very impressed.
I like this poem, I think that it bring a great deal of descriptive detail. I feel as if I am thrown in the middle of the poetry. I believe that you are an amazing writer and that your poetry is one of a kind. Good job.
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