Hey!!
WOW this is an exceptionally good poem!! seriously, I really liked it. The chosen topic is very realistic and coherent. I could really relate to the poem and you hooked me till the end. I loved how you evolved around the subject using personification and onomatopoeia. Your writing is really good since it enables the reader to visualize your descriptions with all the vivid imagery.
I really loved the whole poem and I do not exaggerate. I am just giving my personal opinion. The last verse captured my heart more than the others, 'people don't know their hurting you till it's too late'
Negative points: Check for grammatical mistakes since I've encountered a few while I was reading. Eg. 'their' in the last verse should be 'they're'.
Apart from that well done
-from me
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