I feel like the punctuation and grammar is a bit sketchy in this piece.
I wouldn't normally mention this first, but it detracts from the overall content, because I keep noticing it.
For example:
'your dragged' should be 'you're dragged.'
Towards the end of the piece, you start to lose capitalisation at the start of your lines and the formatting begins to look somewhat sloppy: 'I will give you nothing more, than a simple hello...'
It might just be me being picky, or the way the other letters contrast with the alternate capital 'I' but I think capitals would work better in this piece.
As for the content, I would say that this is a very simple examination of friendship and life and includes themes of regret and wonderment, that I could connect with on a personal level. I enjoyed reading this piece.
Well done.
Points: 240
Reviews: 530
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