This is really good and I'm serious. I love spoken word and I bet when you read this aloud it is full of emotion. It's so very sad though, yet that's when you know you have done a good job as a writer.I'm not going to correct your grammar since other reviewers have already gotten to that. I just wish to address the theme and your diction.
The last lines are the ones that impacted me the most:
this isn't wonderland - this is torture and you're all i can see,
I gotta remember we're all mad here or is it just me?
Great reference to the book. I really love it and it's a very good way to end the poem. This entire poem has a good rhythm to it and it flows well. It breaks my heart so much to read.
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