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Technology Now and Then
We are aware that technology has helped us tremendously. But we are not aware when it came from. Technology begins with the invention of tools and techniques. According to Steve (1997) “The used of stone tools in prehistoric age of hominids is the time that technology begins”. That discovery became the basic factor that leads the people to discover and create more things. After that people learned to use other things that they found in their environment. As time passes by change as continual product of evolution, development, and innovation that really help us.
According to Arthur (2010) of the Santa Fe Institute, “machines started as disparate pieces of seemingly unconnected technologies, but like humans, they also have origin and a process of evolution”. He believes that technology evolves over time. The greater the number of components we have in our disposable, the larger the number of permutations of new technologies that can be created. When time pass by. We are changing technologies that produced into new technologies that can fit our new living things. We create new powerful technologies for new purposes. Today, we used some phenomenon like optical, chemical, and physical to create new technologies. And some believe that in the near future, the machines that we are using today can evolve and not just be use but also rule our world.
The development of technology made work easy. Like the tools we used, for example in farming we used to plow using animal in order to plant, instead of using our bare hands. And tools developed and become a machine. This help is to lessen our effort in doing one task. And machines developed so that it can go with the flow of our modern society, this lead to the invention of automated machines. Automated machines can now limits the effort we used and therefore help and create new more things. If this development continues we can do anything effortless.
The innovations of technology revolutionize higher education and make a new and upgraded things that can improve or lifestyle. We can now work, learn and study when and where we want. The new products of technology make it easier to us. Like the tablets it is larger than mobile phones and smaller than laptop that make us easy to carry it and it can store digital textbook and other useful resources. I am sure there are new products that will be invented in the future that able to help us.
So, how can technology affect our world? We all know that our society benefited in technology. It saved human effort and time. It made distant places closer, and make our big world smaller to live in. Technology helps in every fields of our life, like in our industry, transportation, entertainment, and communication. It even reduced the risk to human life for some machines can do the work of supposed to be for human that can be a life-threatening. “And the fast-advancing technology in our world has given impetus to developments in the various fields and improved the quality of human life.” Oak (2012)
REFERENCES
Arthur (2010) The nature of Technology: What it is and How it Evolves. Website: http://bigthink.com/hybrid-reality/the-evolution-of-technology
Oak (2012). Positive Effects of Technology on Society. Website: http://www.buzzle.com/articles/positive-effects-of-technology-on-society.html
Steve (1997). The Archaeology of Colorado, Revised Edition, Boulder, Colorado: Johnson Books. Pp. 6-14 Retrieved from: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Prehistoric_technology
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Nice essay.Some advice i think you need to spend more time developing your thoughts as it seems kind of rushed at the moment. Try instead to focus on just a one or two aspects rather than delving into everything. It'll give your essay more clarity . But still Job well done. Keep up the good work.
I like how you take a long-view technology, recognizing that humanity has always been shaped by the tools we develop. In today's world, the Internet is transforming the way we interact. But in the prehistoric world, an iron blade would have transformed entire cultures. And between the two, iron was probably far more disruptive of a technology.
In your essay, though, I think you need to spend more time developing your thoughts as it seems kind of rushed at the moment. Try instead to focus on just a one or two aspects rather than delving into everything. It'll give your essay more clarity.
Your conclusion particularly needs some work. Overall, it's actually pretty good, but you don't want to begin it with a question or end it with a quotation. Instead, you want to avoid using questions and you also want to end an essay in your own words.
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Welcome to YWS! Another tech essayist. Well, let's begin, shall we?
Technical:
"But we are not aware when it came from." should be "not aware of where it came from...".
Picky thing: "According to Steve (1997) “The used of stone tools in prehistoric age of hominids is the time that technology begins”. ", your period should be inside your quotes. I keep mine outside in a review [like up there /\ sorta] just to be explicitly clear what's actually in your text and what's not, but in formal writing the end punctuation goes inside the quote, even if it wasn't there in the original. I know, that's something that bothers me too, but it's just gotta be that way.
"He believes that technology evolves over time." Um, I do believe you just quoted him as stating that. This is redundant and unnecessary.
"When time pass by."...when time pass by what? That's a fragment.
"We are changing technologies that produced into new technologies that can fit our new living things." Awkward sentence. "that produced into" needs to be looked into, and "new living things"? What are things?
"Today, we used some phenomenon..." No, it's phenomena. Phenomenon is singular, and it needs to be plural in your sentence.
"like optical, chemical, and physical"...what? What are our "optical, chemical, and physical"? Do you mean that whole list of phenomena? Then write it "like optical, chemical, and physical phenomena". It's not redundant to use that word twice in your sentence and helps make it read better.
" the machines that we are using today can evolve and not just be use but ", not just be use? That's awkward. Please fix it.
"And machines developed so that it can go..." change in subject number. Should be "so they can go..."
"Automated machines can now limits the effort we used..." Two things. One, limit, not limits. Two, use, not used. That's a change in verb tense that doesn't belong.
"If this development continues we can do anything effortless." should be "effortlessly".
"The new products of technology make it easier to us" could better end "for us to use".
"Like the tablets it is larger" Adjust this to "Like the tablet. It is larger"
"smaller than laptop that make us easy to carry it" Make us easy to carry it? I think you mean "make it easy to carry".
"will be invented in the future that able to help us." should be "that will be able to help us."
With your final quote, don't quote the "And". It makes it awkward.
Hope this helps!
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