"Too tired to sleep" that really caught my eye, I never knew someone could be too tired to sleep! ha. I actually really liked this poem it has great imagery. "now or ever before" doesn't make sense to me I feel should be "Not now, nor ever before." but that is just me I'm not sure that way sounds any better.
"I am unfocused, unaware. I cannot bring my mind to settle, a haze shrouds my vision, lead filled veins drag down my limbs, I do not want to move at all."
This is a very relatable line that I feel everyone has experienced in their life! very well done! I liked it
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