Wow you're really talented. I really liked this poem. I was especially fascinated with the lines:
"The reminiscent of a childhood fear
Resurface from the daunting shadow."
It shows that even as we grow older we still have these times of terror as we had when we were children. Not only small children get scared. Also, there is something terrible yet beautiful about a thunderous rainstorm and you really captured both of these aspects.
My only criticism is about how you put parentheses around reflected, forgotten, sharply, and fire. I don't know if you were trying to emphasize the words, but it makes the poem look a bit messy. Maybe you could think up another way of stressing the importance of the words.... Other than that it was a beautiful poem and I can't wait to continue reading your work.
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