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“Some people don’t understand it. That’s okay, that’s good. I hope they never understand. If they have never felt utter hopelessness, if they have never faced a mountain climb just to get out of bed in the mornings, good. It gets to this point where it’s like being a runaway high speed train heading to a bridge that hasn’t been finished yet. No one can stop, less of all yourself. In fact you are the one that’s urging the train to go faster. Faster and faster. You range to clinging to people, hoping they can pull you off the train, but as always people let you down, to turning to people that help feed the train’s engine. You start doing things you never imagined yourself doing. You turn to alcohol, it distracts you, makes you think it’s helping the pain while it silently rips another hole into you. You become reckless, dangerous, someone you always looked down upon. This of course makes things worse. Finally the train you’re stuck on reaches the end of the track and starts diving down into the valley far below. Knowing you will die soon, that the voices will finally be quieten, that the pain will be gone, it’s creates enough calm inside your brain for once, enough calm for you to write one last letter trying to explain. In my case, I’ve written down my whole story, so the person that finds this letter will be able to perhaps consider what I went through. What drove me bring that knife to my wrists one last time.”
Well, that looks to be describing what is some sort of very rapid downward spiral before a death here, and judging by the things mentioned it looks to be this person trying to take their own life as a result of this horrifying spiral, and well, that's definitely a very powerful note here to start this story on. You get a real sense of someone that's slowly been pushed to the limits in their life as you describe what looks to be someone going through some form of depression and then you've done a great job there showing the whole spiral down from turning to things like alcohol to cope before it all comes to a head in the conclusion there at the end. All in all, we have ourselves a really powerful start here, and well, it certainly gets your attention right away here.
I put my pen down onto the dark oak desk one last time. There’s still ink splotches everywhere from the amount of times I’ve broken pens out of writer’s block anger. I breathe in the lingering paint fumes left over from when I painted, in one last time. The knife’s blade catches the light as I bring it to my left wrist. The knife, as it always has doesn’t fail me. Blood drops starts covering the ink splotches. I idly believe I hear a car in the driveway as I close my eyes. The last thing I hear is a scream before the calming blackness takes me under.
Well, that escalated a bit quicker than I was expecting, I was definitely things to end that way here right at the start but well it looks like this person went through with their death quite fast there and well, a very powerful ending to this piece here and I suppose whether they actually died does remain a bit of a mystery which leaves things on a slight cliffhanger there, at any rate, a very powerful opening here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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